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Develop a reason rather than repeat an opinion.
Practice question: Some universities make recordings of every lecture available to students. Do the advantages of this practice outweigh the disadvantages?
First draft:
Recorded lectures are good for students. They can learn many things and it is very useful. For example, students can watch the lectures. Therefore, recordings are beneficial for education.
The paragraph repeats that recordings are useful, but does not explain what a student can do with them. Before opening the revision, write your own paragraph on paper or in your notes:
- Name one specific benefit.
- Explain how it helps a student.
- Give a concrete example and connect it back to the benefit.
Compare an example revision and its explanation
One advantage of recorded lectures is that students can revisit explanations they did not fully understand in class. A first-year student learning statistical methods, for example, could replay the demonstration of a calculation and pause to check each step. This would allow the student to prepare more specific questions for the next tutorial. Recordings are therefore useful as a supplement to attending class, especially when a subject introduces unfamiliar procedures.
- A clearer reason: “revisit explanations” identifies what the recording makes possible.
- Development: the statistical-methods example shows replaying, pausing and checking a step, rather than repeating the word “useful”.
- A measured conclusion: “as a supplement” limits the claim. It does not suggest that recordings replace every part of attending class.
What is still missing? This is one body paragraph. A complete answer must explain your overall judgement about whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, with enough relevant development across the essay.
Try the same skill again: Develop a paragraph explaining one possible disadvantage of relying on recorded lectures. Make its example different from the one above, then check whether it changes your overall judgement.
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